Tag: Storytelling

The Storytelling Technique That Puts Your Donor Inside the Story

Chris Davenport  |  Ask
Inside story.

(And Why It Raises More Money Than Any “About Us” Paragraph Ever Could)

The following is a hand-picked guest post from Chris Davenport. Enjoy, and you can read more about Chris below.

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Great storytelling doesn’t just make you care.
It makes you feel like you belong in the story.

That’s the magic trick behind one of the most effective storytelling techniques in fundraising:
Write for the donor, not to them.

It’s a tiny shift in language that creates a massive emotional shift in the reader.

Because here’s the truth:
You’re not just telling a story.
You’re inviting the donor to step into it.

Why “TO the Donor” Storytelling Falls Flat

It sounds like this:

“We launched a new program to serve families facing housing insecurity.”
“Our staff provided shelter for 42 families last month.”

That’s writing to the donor.

You’re telling them what happened.
You’re reporting, not storytelling.

There’s no invitation. No emotion.
Just information.

The donor is outside the story, looking in — like reading a plaque at a museum.
They might nod. They might feel impressed.
But they won’t feel needed.

And if they don’t feel needed, they’re not likely to give.

Write “FOR the Donor” — and Watch What Happens

This version pulls the reader into the action — as if they were there:

“You can help a mom tuck her kids into bed tonight in a room that’s warm and safe.”

Now the donor isn’t reading a story.
They’re in the story.

They can picture it.
They can feel it.
And most importantly — they know exactly how to help.

Here’s How It Works:

The FOR Storytelling Framework

You + [emotion or physical action] + [specific outcome]

  • “You’ll hand a warm meal to a child who hasn’t eaten since yesterday.”
  • “You can be the reason someone whispers, ‘I finally feel safe.’”
  • “You’ll flip the light switch in a shelter room that’s been dark for too long.”

The goal? Don’t just describe what happened.
Describe what the donor makes happen.

That’s a story they’ll want to be part of.

Tiny Scene, Big Emotion

Want to take it one step further? Add a detail that locks the scene in their memory:

Instead of:

“You’ll provide winter coats for kids in need…”

Try:

“You’ll zip up a puffy red coat around a 6-year-old named Eli — just before the snow hits.”

That’s not just storytelling.
That’s cinematic fundraising.

How to Use This in Real Life

Next time you write an appeal, a thank-you letter, or a donation page:

Look for the sentences that begin with:

  • “We need…”
  • “Our goal is…”
  • “This program will…”

Rewrite just one using the FOR formula.
Make the donor the one doing the action.
Make them the reason something good happens.

That’s the storytelling switch that unlocks generosity.

Final Word

This isn’t fluff.
This is one of the most powerful storytelling techniques you can learn as a fundraiser:

Write the story so your donor feels like they’re in it.

Not watching.
Not applauding.

Acting.

That’s how you turn a reader into a giver.
And a giver into a champion.

Want more storytelling techniques like this?
You’ll find a whole library of bite-sized wins over in the QuickApply Collection—smart, fast strategies to help you write stories that move people and raise more money. No fluff. Just tools that work.

Go poke around. Your next breakthrough might be one click away.

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Steven says: “Chris Davenport is the founder of the Nonprofit Storytelling Conference – the most practical and impactful fundraising conference there is.  Chris has trained thousands of Fundraisers to use story-driven communication to raise more money and build deeper relationships with donors.  Check out his ‘QuickApply’ library if you’d like to know more, and I hope to see you at this year’s conference!”

Three Stories that Move Donors to Give

Chris Davenport  |  Repeat
Stories for action.

The following is a hand-picked guest post from Chris Davenport.  Enjoy, and you can read more about Chris below.

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A simple (and kind of genius) framework to help your donor feel amazing — and keep giving

Donor communications can feel like a grind.

Whether you’re writing an appeal, a thank-you, or a report — you’re constantly trying to find the right words to keep people engaged, inspired, and giving.

And if you’ve ever thought:
“How many ways can I tell the same story?”
“What do I even say in this update?”
“Does any of this actually matter to the donor?”

You’re not alone. And you’re not doing it wrong.

The truth is:
You don’t need endless stories.
You don’t need a brand-new emotional angle every time.
You just need a simple rhythm your donor can feel—and respond to.

You don’t need a million stories.
You just need three.
And they follow a simple, powerful path.

And yes — it works whether you serve people, protect ecosystems, fund the arts, or fight for policy change.

Maybe your organization protects forests. Or fights for clean air. Or keeps art alive in schools.

You might not think of your cause as having a “beneficiary,” but you absolutely have something (or someone) at stake.

The key is to treat that thing — whether it’s a river, a painting, a policy, or a species — as a character in your story.

  • What does it need?
  • What threatens it?
  • What changes if the donor steps in?

If a wetland is about to be bulldozed…
If a coral reef is hanging by a thread…
If a mural is being erased from a neighborhood…

You have a story.
You just need to frame it like one. And once you do, these 3 stories become your new go-to.

And once you do, these 3 stories become your new go-to.

1. The Story That Asks

What your donor’s gift WILL do

This is where the donor steps into the story — not as a bystander, but as the person who can change everything.

You share a real, unresolved situation. The stakes are high. The outcome is not yet written.

And the donor? They’re the missing piece.

Example (Human story):
“Right now, Mia is 7 years old and skipping school — not because she doesn’t want to learn, but because hunger makes it impossible to focus.
With your $25 gift, you’ll place a hot meal in front of her tonight.”

Example (Environmental):
“Right now, ancient trees that house hundreds of species are days away from being cut down.
Your gift will help protect this forest from permanent destruction.”

This is the story where their gift WILL do something powerful.
It’s full of urgency, emotion, and possibility.

2. The Story That Thanks

What your donor’s gift IS doing

Now zoom in on the moment of impact.

This isn’t a receipt or a vague “thank you for supporting our mission.”
This is a snapshot. A sigh of relief. A small-but-holy moment the donor made possible.

Example (Human):
“Mia sat down in the lunchroom with a hot meal on her tray — just like you provided. She picked up her fork, looked up at her teacher, and whispered, ‘Tell them thank you for me.’”

Example (Environmental):
“Right now, your gift is fueling a team of rangers patrolling the forest line — keeping the chainsaws out and the wildlife safe. Because of you, protection is happening today.”

This is where your donor feels the impact of their gift IS in motion — right now.

3. The Story That Reports

What your donor’s gift DID

Now you complete the loop.

This is the victory lap — but it’s not just celebration. It’s an invitation. You show what their gift accomplished and what still needs to be done.

Example (Human):
“Because of you, Mia is back in school and smiling again. She hasn’t missed a day in weeks. But this morning, a new child walked in late… head down, stomach growling.
Will you give again so they don’t have to sit through class hungry?”

Example (Environmental):
“Your gift saved this forest. You kept the chainsaws out — and the birds, the trees, the life here?
They’re still thriving because of you.
But the destruction didn’t stop. Just down the road, another ancient grove is marked for clearing.
Will you step in again?”

This story reminds them: You gave. It helped. Want to do it again?

Why This Works (and why it feels so good)

These three stories follow a rhythm that donors love — whether they realize it or not:

  • The Ask Story shows what their gift WILL do
  • The Thank You Story shows what their gift IS doing
  • The Report Story shows what their gift DID

That framework — WILL, IS, DID — comes from Steven Screen at the Better Fundraising Company. And once you start using it, you’ll never go back.

Because when your donor sees their gift in motion, it builds trust.
When they feel what they made possible, it builds joy.
And when they’re invited to keep going, it builds momentum.

This isn’t just better storytelling.
It’s better fundraising.
And it feels better to send, too.

Bonus Tip: Want more stuff like this?

You’ll love the QuickApply Library. [https://nonprofitstorytellingconference.com/quickapply-library/]

It’s full of fast, practical mini-guides to help you raise more money with better stories. These aren’t the same old tips — most of what’s in there is new, or at least totally re-framed to be easier and more effective.

No fluff. Just storytelling tools that work.

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Steven says: “Chris Davenport is the founder of the Nonprofit Storytelling Conference – the most practical and impactful fundraising conference there is.  Chris has trained thousands of Fundraisers to use story-driven communication to raise more money and build deeper relationships with donors.  Check out his ‘QuickApply’ library if you’d like to know more, and I hope to see you at this year’s conference!”

Share Stories That Support Your Ask

Sarah Lundberg  |  Ask
What's your story?

Before my time at The Better Fundraising Co, I used to be a Director of Marketing and Communications for a nonprofit. But then the nonprofit I was working at needed me to create their fundraising materials from scratch, and I discovered a whole new world of expertise — it challenged the beliefs that my nonprofit and I had for how fundraising worked.

But we started raising a LOT more money. 

When we learned more about the role of stories in our fundraising, it helped us shape our fundraising pieces to perform better.

Our organization had GREAT stories, but we didn’t always share them in a way that worked effectively for fundraising.

Sometimes we would share a long story that would be full of details and symbolism and references to historical happenings. We loved these stories, but they didn’t seem to work when we were asking donors to give in direct response fundraising.

When we learned to use the right story for the right fundraising piece, our fundraising results increased.

Based on expert advice, we gave each fundraising piece ONE purpose, either asking donors to give or reporting back on what their giving had done.

We started sharing incomplete stories in our fundraising appeals, to show the donors the need that existed. These stories featured someone facing a problem that hadn’t yet been solved. This was an effective part of a piece where we were asking donors to give.

We shared completed stories in our newsletters, to show the donors what their giving had accomplished. These stories featured someone who had been facing a problem and also how the donor’s gift helped to solve the problem. This helped us report back to the donor and show that they made a difference.

This felt different to us internally.

For one thing, our stories were shorter and simpler.  But once we got the hang of it, finding and sharing stories was easier. We knew exactly what kind of stories we were looking for, depending on whether we were asking in an appeal or reporting back in a newsletter.

Something that makes me chuckle… back in the day when I was on staff at a nonprofit, the more I learned about best practices for direct response and email fundraising, the more I realized we’d been doing things the hard way.

Once we learned the fundamentals of what worked, everything became easier, including sharing stories. We knew what to do and how to do it.

When we started doing something that was easier AND raised more money – that was a win for us!

Read the whole series:

Outline for Newsletter Stories

Steven Screen  |  Report
newsletter.

Here’s the outline we follow for newsletter stories.

It’s remarkably simple and it does two powerful things:

  1. It makes your newsletter easier and faster to write because you have a model to follow
  2. It makes sure each story helps you achieve the purpose of your newsletter

Sounds pretty good, doesn’t it?

Simple Newsletter Outline

PARAGRAPHS 1-2

  • Summarize the situation the beneficiary was in
  • Tell the donor the situation changed because of them
  • Summarize the positive situation the beneficiary is in today

PARAGRAPHS 3-5

  • Tell the beneficiary’s “story” as above, but go into more depth

FINAL PARAGRAPH

  • Thank the donor for making the transformation (from “before” to “after”) possible
  • Thank the donor for caring about the beneficiary enough to take action to help

The Power of This Approach

When you use this approach, your donor does not have to read more than the first paragraph to get your newsletter’s main message; that the donor’s gift made a meaningful difference in the life of one person or for your cause.

At Better Fundraising, we assume that 80% of the people who open your newsletter will only read the headlines, picture captions, and a paragraph or two. For those people (4 out of 5!) you want to do everything you can to ensure they still get your main message.

Other nonprofits will make their donors wade through tons of words to find out whether donors’ gifts made a difference. Sometimes the donor will never find out. I’ve seen newsletters where the donor is never even be mentioned.

But by following this model, you and your organization will communicate your main message to almost every person who opens your newsletter. That’s a huge win!

Repeat This Formula in Every Story

When a donor opens your newsletter you don’t know which story (or stories) they are going to read. So you want to use this formula for every story so – whatever they read – they get message that their gift made a difference.

This approach will feel repetitive to you – who sees every story. But vast majority of your donors won’t read every story.

It will feel repetitive to your staff and core stakeholders like your board because are far more likely than most donors to open every newsletter and read every story.

But Remember …

Your newsletter is not for you, your staff, or for your core stakeholders. It’s a communication vehicle to show the remaining 95% of your donors that their gift made a meaningful difference.

Why is showing donors that they made a meaningful difference so important?

So that they trust that giving a gift to your organization makes a real difference.

So that they are more likely to give you a gift the next time you ask.

So that they are more likely to keep giving to you year after year.

So that they are more likely to become a major donor.

So that they are more likely to leave you a gift in their will.

So … no pressure … but make sure your newsletter shows each donor that their gift made a meaningful difference. And one of the most powerful ways to do that is to write the stories following this outline.

This post was originally published on March 3, 2020 in a series of 10 posts on Donor-Delighting Newsletters. This series has been published as an e-book that can be downloaded here.

Three Questions to Get the Best Newsletter Stories

McKenzie Mitchell  |  Report
Questions and stories.

Want to write newsletter stories that show your donors the incredible impact they have had on your beneficiaries?

It’s easy, and I’m going to show you how.  But first you need to know one thing…

Most donors give because they want to make change.  They want the world to be noticeably different and better because of their gift. 

The best way to show donors the change that their gift made is to clearly demonstrate what the beneficiary’s life was like before and after the donor’s gift (and your organization) helped them.

Here are three questions you can ask a beneficiary that will give you everything you need to write a story that will make your donors feel amazing:

  1. What was your life like before <your organization/program/staff> helped you?
  2. What is your life like now because of the help you received?
  3. If you could say anything to thank donors who gave to support <your organization>, what would you tell them?

Ask these three questions and you’ll have a story that shows the change the donor’s gift help make.

By telling stories like this when you “report back” to your donors, you’ll build trust because your donors will see that their gifts cause change.  And because of that, they’ll be more likely to say “yes” the next time you ask for support in an appeal.

Which story are you telling?

Steven Screen  |  Ask
Storytelling.

Better Fundraising recently decided to sponsor the Nonprofit Storytelling Conference this fall.  (You should go!)  So lately I’ve been thinking a lot about storytelling.

I’ve noticed that when most nonprofits are thinking about “storytelling” in their fundraising, they are thinking about one of two stories:

  1. The story of a beneficiary.  You’ve seen loads of appeals like this: they focus on the story of one beneficiary who has already been helped, then ask the donor to support the work of the organization.  The storytelling focus is on the beneficiary.  Or…
  2. The story of the organization.  You’ve seen fundraising materials like this, too; they focus on what services the organization provides, what year the organization was founded, and what the organization believes.  The storytelling focus is on the organization itself. 

At Better Fundraising, we advise our clients not to tell either of those stories.

Instead, we help our clients tell “the story of the difference the donor’s gift will make.”  The storytelling focus is on the change that will happen when a donor gives a gift.

At its simplest, it looks like this; “Right now things are X, but if you give a gift they will be Y.”  Doing this well helps your donors to see and (more importantly) feel the difference their gift will help make.

Telling the story of “the difference that the donor’s gift will make” is a fundamentally different story than most organizations tell.  It results in fundamentally different appeals.

And those appeals raise significantly more money.

Ask yourself if the storytelling in your appeals is mostly about your beneficiaries or your organization.  If you’d like to raise more with your appeals, try an appeal that focuses on the difference a donor can make if they send in a gift.

How to Increase Your Email Open Rate by 14%

Steven Screen  |  Report
Email Open Rates.

A client of ours started sending monthly “e-stories” last November. And since November, their average email open rate has increased from 24% to 38%.

Most organizations would sacrifice a Board member for a 14% increase in open rates!

So you might ask, “What’s an e-story?”

An e-story is a low-fi, simply-formatted email from your E.D. to your donors. It tells one “before and after” story.

Here’s the outline:

  1. Warm, personal greeting
  2. Directly tell the donor that you are going to tell them a story that’s a good example of how their gift made a difference
  3. Tell a “before and after” story from your organization’s work
  4. Reaffirm to the donor that they helped make that ‘before and after’ happen
  5. Let the donor know that they can give again if they’d like to
  6. Thank the donor for their generosity

You want your e-stories to look like they came from your E.D.’s personal email. No formatting, no header image, no photo, no links to social, you get it.

It should feel personal.

Why E-stories?

Most “reporting” to donors via email answers questions that nobody is asking.

Typical “e-news” or “e-newsletters” have abysmal open rates. No one was reading them.

So how can organizations fulfill the need to “report back on a donor’s gift” via email?

If they aren’t reading the e-newsletters, that means e-newsletters aren’t relevant for most donors.

So we asked ourselves, “What would be relevant to most donors?”

Telling and showing the donor that their gift made a difference.

The Results

Your e-stories will raise more money than your e-newsletter.

Your e-stories will have higher open rates than your e-newsletter.

Your e-stories will cause more engagement than your e-newsletter (you’ll know this because of the replies and feedback you’ll receive).

Some organizations have been able to cease their e-newsletter all together. (And there was much rejoicing!)

Relevance

It all comes down to relevance. The organization I mentioned found that e-stories contained information that was relevant to their donors. (After all, donors want to know what their gift did more than they want to know what your organization is up to.)

When the content of the email was more relevant, more people opened the emails. And now, because their donors are more likely to find relevant content in their emails, their donors open all of their emails at a higher rate.

You can guess what’s going to happen next:

More relevant emails → higher open rates

Higher open rates → more people reading their fundraising

More people reading their fundraising → more people giving

More people giving → more mission work done!

Go look at your organization’s email communications. Are you reporting in a powerful, relevant way? If not, add a few e-stories. You’ll be glad you did!

Note: if you want me to walk you through creating an e-story (or donor reporting letter) for your organization, there’s inexpensive training at Work Less Raise More.

The #1 Story that Raises the Most Money [VIDEO]

Steven Screen  |  Videos
Money ideas.

I think this is the most helpful video I’ve ever made.

If you’d like to know how to:

  • Tell stories in your appeals, e-appeals and events so that more donors will respond
  • Tell stories so that your donors become more bonded to your organization
  • Tell stories so that you raise more money
  • Say what’s needed when sharing this thinking with the people in your organization who don’t like powerful fundraising

It’s all in there. Take a look!

10 Great Questions to Help You Collect Better Stories

Jonathan Steck  |  Ask
questions

As you know from our involvement with the upcoming Storytelling Conference, we believe storytelling in your fundraising can be very effective. A good story will help to support your fundraising offer and connect your donor to what your nonprofit does.

There’s good reason for this, too. Telling stories is what humans do best. Ever since we were drawing pictures onto the side of rocks, storytelling has been our go-to form of communication. With a good story, we’re able to share our passions, our hardships, and our joys. It’s often the best way to explain how things work, how we make decisions, how we persuade others.

For us fundraisers, a good story is vital to engaging our donors. A moving story, if told simply and well, will invoke emotion and motivate her to give. But putting a story together is not always easy. Especially when you’re dealing with beneficiaries who may be embarrassed, shy, or reluctant to share about the difficulties they’ve faced.

So how can you collect the information you need to tell a compelling story in your fundraising communications?

To collect a good fundraising story (including emotional quotes that you can use to help the donor feel something) you need to first see several sides of the beneficiary. And one great way to do that is to interview a beneficiary in person, over the phone, or via email.

But it’s not just a matter of asking them to “tell their story.” You need to ask specific questions that are worded and framed correctly. Do this, and you will get the responses you need.

To help you get started, here are 10 interview questions I’ve used to get great responses from beneficiaries. If you end up using any of these questions, make sure that you adjust the wording to suit your cause and your nonprofit.

  • Tell me your first memory of (what your nonprofit prevents or supports)?
  • What did you find most challenging about (the cause)?
  • What was the best/worst thing to happen?
  • What would someone be surprised to know about you?
  • Tell me how you first got involved with (your nonprofit)
  • What did you think when you first met (your nonprofit)?
  • Tell me how (your nonprofit) helped you
  • If you hadn’t met (your nonprofit) what do you think your life would be like?
  • What does your future look like now?
  • If you had the chance to say something to those who have helped you, what would it be?

You can also pepper any answers with follow up questions like, “What makes you say that? Can you give me an example? How did that make you feel?”

Stories inspire us to act. So whatever it is that your organization does for others – providing food, clothing, safe housing, safety, or spiritual support – capturing and then telling a beneficiary story can support your offer and help you raise more money.

Happy Fundraising!